Dallas Tillman

1st stanza: if one of your verbs is going to be plural, unify the entire stanza by making all the verbs plural. Example: "the howls of anguish" instead of "the ...

Gold star, fellow writer. Though it is what you say (rambling), it was worth reading the entire way through. The uniformed writing, not capitalized unless absolutely necessary, was great, allowing ...

Agreed with all those posted above. This topic is quite cliched, and some punctuation is needed for more flow. However, you are very into your work and have the heart ...

I'm not that big a fan of rap music. However, unlike some rappers I've heard out there, this actually seems well written in comparison. There seems to be something missing, ...

Not bad. It is as good to read as it is to see the picture created in one's mind. However, I must say a few things. making me smile 'making' ...

Amusing, though we really need something more serious here. If you want to see something serious, check out other poems on the board, preferably the ones labeled by others as ...

Bash on Twilight! Bash on Twilight! Thank goodness you wrote that! That was really funny and relieving! There are too many Twilight fans at my school, so I practically hear ...

THAT made my day! There's too many people interested in that "Twilight" thing. As soon as it came out, that was just about the only thing I heard about from ...

Not much religious works going around. Just a little question: aren't you ever afraid, whenever you post something like this, that someone will come and criticize you for mere subject ...

This is truly what cats do. In this short work, you have perfectly summarized the day to day events of a cat. Both of mine operate in almost the same ...

Capitalize a word in two conditions: end of sentence or new line, but not both at the same time. Nice extended metaphor for the "birds." Also, to make the poem ...

On the contrary, this pen has quite some ink left. The imagery creates a depressing tone, leaving the reader to feel "Has this writer sucked up every last amount of ...

Great work, though try to be more involved in your work. It is as if you are detatched, outside of your work. Put your heart and soul into writing and ...

Quite nice... very dark. Interesting imagery. It enhances the dark/almost depressing tone of the poem/song. As for punctuation and spelling mistakes, none seen. I must say that you don't have ...